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Feuersturm by ~thespanadian:iconthespanadian:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Other Romance > Open


The Blitz
has gotten a hold of me, baby.
Everything goes away so fast -
even you,
and your thoughts of me,
and your memories,
and the flowers I picked for you
yesterday.
They've all slipped away,
gone up into the flames,
into the storm.
But still I go out
into the roaring winds,
into the lurid glow of the fire,
to feel the ashes of our past
burn against my skin,
and as I close my eyes,
let the maelstrom whip around me,
I think of you.

For you, I'd take the fall,
And I know you'd love me --
you'd truly, truly love me --
if you could only
see past these scars.
©2009 ~thespanadian
:iconthespanadian:

Author's Comments

(Psst... Give me title suggestions!)

Just something that came out of nowhere, something spur of the moment and out of the blue. Maybe a character poem? I dunno. While constructive criticism is appreciated, I think I pretty much know where the faults are in this poem. I don't think it's one of my best.

P.S: I'm sorry about the double submission, but I had to delete and resubmit because it wasn't showing up in my gallery.

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:iconlizzysunshine77:
~lizzysunshine77 May 31, 2009, 5:56:08 PM
What I absolutely adore about this is the sheer WWII refs as well as the romantic themes. Only you could successfully pull that off. Like it's refreshing to read, but you leave your little trademarks and it totally screams "Kaaaathy!" in a totally good way.
I really like the way you used fire, and focused on the ashes instead of just the actual fire, seeing as ashes tend to hurt more than actual flame. I think. I'm not good at science.

--
I'm a pretty impossible lady to be with.
:iconrandom-kumquats:
~random-kumquats Jun 8, 2009, 12:56:05 PM
for a title, how about "Highway in Berlin"?

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:iconthespanadian:
~thespanadian Jun 11, 2009, 2:26:50 PM
Sounds good! :D I'll put it at the top of my list.
:iconthespanadian:
~thespanadian Jun 24, 2009, 7:03:12 AM
That makes two of us! XDDDD

Thanks so much for the compliments, Liz! :D :hug: They really mean a lot. I'm not too proud of my poetry.
:iconvegarden:
~vegarden Sep 20, 2009, 8:54:18 PM
I'm no pro when it comes to writing, but this piece composed really vivid scenes in my head. Easily digestible with an impact. :)
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